Wow! This is coming along really well! You’re figured out how to use your skills to create a convincing, compelling speech—already. I’m impressed. I like how you use your own experiences to support your candidacy and how you reach out to feel our pain, too. I’m inspired.
Ethos: I sort of see “confident” and “trustworthy,” but these aren’t your real focus. You seem much more “passionate” (for example). I’m not sure what I need to trust you about. Perhaps you might shift your term.
Pathos: If you want to make me feel safe, you need to say more about what you’re going to do to secure my safety. Sure, you want to protect me and my fellow fans, but how are you going to do this? I’ll feel safe when I know you have a plan that I think you can carry out, one that will allow me to walk the halls with my Harry Potter t-shirt and not be worried. Tell me how you’ll do this.
Nellie:
ReplyDeleteWow! This is coming along really well! You’re figured out how to use your skills to create a convincing, compelling speech—already. I’m impressed. I like how you use your own experiences to support your candidacy and how you reach out to feel our pain, too. I’m inspired.
Ethos: I sort of see “confident” and “trustworthy,” but these aren’t your real focus. You seem much more “passionate” (for example). I’m not sure what I need to trust you about. Perhaps you might shift your term.
Pathos: If you want to make me feel safe, you need to say more about what you’re going to do to secure my safety. Sure, you want to protect me and my fellow fans, but how are you going to do this? I’ll feel safe when I know you have a plan that I think you can carry out, one that will allow me to walk the halls with my Harry Potter t-shirt and not be worried. Tell me how you’ll do this.