Your arguments are very good. You go into detail as to why the car is a good choice. Your tone is also very upbeat and helps your arguments which relate to your life directly.
If possible, for next time, try to either speak up, or get closer to the microphone. I found it a little difficult to hear at times.
I thought you did a great job overall. I like how you introduced yourself and make it funny by saying "a jeep? for her?" You made your video personal by giving examples, like driving people around for field hockey. I think next time you could work on eye contact and not reading from your script as much. You had terrific confidence though, which made your video fun to watch. Good job overall!
Great speech Nellie- You definitely seemed excited about your new car. Providing the viewer with information about your drivers education to show that your are a strong driver was a nice idea. Also speaking about what you specifically plan to use the car for worked well. I think it would help if you placed your script closer to your camera so that your eyes are not facing downwards so often, and project your voice a touch more if possible.
You immediately opened with tremendous enthusiasm, and then followed with a question -- an excellent opening to the video. Afterward, you followed with personal anecdotes from your life that put your choice in context.
At a few points, you lost eye contact with the camera. Also, finishing with "thank you" seemed out of place for an argument meant to convince.
Your arguments are very good. You go into detail as to why the car is a good choice.
ReplyDeleteYour tone is also very upbeat and helps your arguments which relate to your life directly.
If possible, for next time, try to either speak up, or get closer to the microphone. I found it a little difficult to hear at times.
Good confidence...nice job.
I thought you did a great job overall. I like how you introduced yourself and make it funny by saying "a jeep? for her?" You made your video personal by giving examples, like driving people around for field hockey. I think next time you could work on eye contact and not reading from your script as much. You had terrific confidence though, which made your video fun to watch. Good job overall!
ReplyDeleteGreat speech Nellie- You definitely seemed excited about your new car. Providing the viewer with information about your drivers education to show that your are a strong driver was a nice idea. Also speaking about what you specifically plan to use the car for worked well. I think it would help if you placed your script closer to your camera so that your eyes are not facing downwards so often, and project your voice a touch more if possible.
ReplyDeleteYou immediately opened with tremendous enthusiasm, and then followed with a question -- an excellent opening to the video. Afterward, you followed with personal anecdotes from your life that put your choice in context.
ReplyDeleteAt a few points, you lost eye contact with the camera. Also, finishing with "thank you" seemed out of place for an argument meant to convince.